Too dull, too grey, too dark…

Last time I critiqued this picture. I used Nancy Reyner’s “This picture is too…”-formula. I thought it was too… dull, grey-green, dark and even. This is what it looked like.

Version before last

Now I made some changes. I was going to do the four elements (a. dull, b. grey-green, c. dark and d. even) one by one. But one thing sort of automatically lead to another… And these four elements hang together anyway. So this is my next phase

Present phase

I’m pretty happy with these changes. Pretty happy, but of course not completely happy. So let’s do the “This picture is too…”-formula again. I’m pretty language driven, so this works for me just great.

“This picture is too…” Hmm, nothing comes up. And I know why. I am happy with this next phase as a whole. There are just some elements I want to change.

The blue creature is too blue. The blue creature is too dotted (dots didn’t work, probably because it’s the only element with this type of patterning). The white circle in the center is still too dark. The yellow mask on the right is too transparent.

All easy to fix, I think. I’ll keep you posted.

About the Author JAAPH

JAAPH is an expressionist painter living in Nijmegen, The Netherlands.